It took six months to write the first draft of the
manuscript of my novel, The Code of the
Hills: An Ozarks Mystery. Once it
was done, I heaved a sigh and readied myself for the next step: pitching it to
literary agents.
Should I have devoted time and effort to revision at that
point? Oh, yeah—but that’s another story.
When planning my query, I did some homework. Because I had
no publishing contacts whatsoever and lived in (you might say) the middle of
nowhere, I needed inspiration. But I’d heard of a recent literary sensation
that rose like the phoenix from an unlikely place: Stephenie Meyer.
My daughter was a fan of the Twilight series, and so I
checked out Stephenie Meyer’s history. She shared her road to success on her
author page: after seeing her characters
in a dream, she wrote a book and sent a query letter to 16 agents. One of the
agents was Jodi Reamer at writers House. Jodi fell in love with the manuscript
and sold it to a Big Six publisher a month or so later. Oh, I thought, so
that’s how it works.
Not my experience. I sent out a batch of hard-copy
queries. Every query was rejected. (Save your postage, btw. Email those query
letters.)
So I went back to work on the letter. My research said
that the first sentence of a query letter was crucial; they called it “the
hook” and said it had to grab the agent’s attention. I gave it some thought,
and for my hook—my first sentence—I said, “Every young attorney who longs for
the case of the century learns a hard lesson: be careful what you wish for.”
It wasn’t bad, I got a couple of nibbles. But I eventually
decided that my hook was not a sufficient “grabber” to separate me from the
pack. So I changed it. I had read somewhere that it’s wise to compare your book
to another appealing book, so I did that. New hook: “If two of your favorite
books are To Kill a Mockingbird and Valley of the Dolls, then you should
read The Code of the Hills.”
Did I get a response? Yes. But when you liken your work to
a Pulitzer-prize winning classic of American literature crossed with a cult
classic, it can be tough to deliver. (Note to self: if the comparison makes you
blush, don’t use it.)
When I adapted the hook again, fate was on my side. Dan
Woodrell’s Winter’s Bone had been a
literary sensation, and the indie film version of Winter’s Bone was the black horse nominee for Best Picture at the Academy Awards. Like Woodrell, I’m an author from the
Missouri Ozark hills, and the Ozarks is my setting. Did I seize the moment?
Hell, yeah. New hook: “If you were intrigued by the
“hillbilly noir” world depicted in Winter’s
Bone, then you should read The Code of the Hills.”
It was like magic. Requests came pouring in. I snagged an
agent; and another agent after that. And ultimately, my Ozarks tale was sold to
HarperCollins.
And the moral of my story? It was partly luck (thank you,
Dan Woodrell), no doubt about it. But when crafting and sending that query
letter, you must remain flexible. Change it out. Mix it up. I truly believe
that some agents read only the first sentence; and I believe, as well, that the
industry is driven by what’s happening now. So if you have sent out the query
letter for your novel and you aren’t getting the
reception you’d like: if at first, you don’t succeed, try, try again.
Nancy Allen |
Nancy Allen is a member of the law faculty in the College of Business at Missouri State University. She practiced law for 15 years, serving as Assistant Missouri Attorney General and as Assistant Prosecutor in her native Ozarks. When Nancy began her term as prosecutor, she was only the second woman in Southwest Missouri to serve in that capacity. During her years in prosecution, she tried over 30 jury trials, including murder and sexual offenses, and she served on the Rape Crisis Board and the child protection team of the Child Advocacy Council. THE CODE OF THE HILLS is her first novel.
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2 Comments
What an interesting story. And it all hinged on just a sentence. So glad it worked out for the author!
ReplyDeleteLance, it's crazy--but that hook is tremendously important. You could be Harper Lee, sitting on TKAM--but if the first sentence of the pitch is flat, the agent will never see what a treasure the book is.
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